Changes to the first verse

Our teacher was enthusiastic about the second pitch, however she didn't like the idea for the first verse, as it doesn't seem to correspond well to the rest of the music video. So our group came up with an alternative idea for the First verse:

2) First Verse - We see the girl from the woods emerge out of a tree draped in streamers, she walks along a path and sees a clown holding balloons beside her, the shot is very close to her side so you can not see the arm farthest away from the clown. She watches the clown till it is out of sight then turns to the camera, the camera pans to the side where her arm has been cut out to show her arm holding a balloon, she looks in curiosity then turns back, point of view shot - the clown is gone. Cut to a shot of her sat on a chair strapped to the chair with streamers wrapped around her body the clown emerges slowly standing up from behind her, and covers her face with its hands as she struggles.

I think the idea links better to the idea of the clown being fantastical, and taking over her body, indicating that she has some kind of split personality disorder. I think this idea is more interesting than the first two ideas, and will have a more captivating look to it.